If It Isn’t Her
Last time with Helene Troy: http://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/2012/02/09/cat-power/
The sound of water bathing rattling dishes in the kitchen sink distracted Ramona to Helene’s vibrating cell phone. Helene grabbed it and headed to the bedroom to remove the dress and shoes and pack them until it was time to get ready for her show. Darcy was calling.
“Darse, what is it?”
Helene heard her whimper. She looked around the bedroom for Ramona then walked into the closet to talk to Darcy.
“Darse, this has been coming for a long time. Just do me a favor. When you get to the apartment, stay out of my bathroom. Two kittens are in there. The landlord knows.”
Through more whimpering, Helene heard Darcy utter a muffled, “I miss us Leney.”
Helene felt a hurt across her chest. She held the phone against her forehead and tried think of how she’d reply. She brought the phone back to her ear responded in a way she’d regret.
“I miss us too, but that’s not what this is about. I have to go, Darse. I’m with someone else.”
Helene hung up and dropped the phone to the carpet. She stripped down to her bra and panties and looked for her jeans and t-shirt. Ramona’s long fingers moved over the small of Helene’s back. They were cold from the kitchen sink water.
“Leney, should I be jealous?”
Ramona had heard the phone call, Helene assumed. She straightened her posture. Ramona’s hands moved to her hips. She didn’t turn around. She feared Ramona’s expression.
“I’ve moved on, ‘Mona. I really want us to happen.”
Silence moved throughout the apartment into the small closet. Ramona’s body purred against Helene as she hugged her from behind. She nestled Helene’s bare shoulders with her nose.. Her hands caressed Helene’s pulsating stomach.
“Leney, I realize you don’t have time. I just want you to know I really want us, too.”
Helene dropped the jeans from her left hand and turned to Ramona. She tossed her brown mane, smiled provocatively and answered.
“I’ll make time.”
***blogger’s note****
This is a new episode of The Ballad of Helene Troy. You can find the rest of the story, so far, here: http://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/the-ballad-of-helene-troy/ This is in response to a Valentine’s Day prompt from Trifecta Writing Challenge: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2012/02/trifextra-week-three.html A love story in 333 words, not using 33 cliched words.
Today’s song is perfect for the this scene. Ani DiFranco strips down the message to this – If it isn’t her, it isn’t here. Helene pushes Darcy out of her life and lets Ramona in. Nothing will be the same.
Posted on February 10, 2012, in 333 words, beauty, fiction, Helene Troy, music, new story episode, passion, super short story, Trifecta, writing exercise and tagged 333 words, fiction, Helene Troy, love story, new story episode, Trifecta. Bookmark the permalink. 17 Comments.


wooo…hot and steamy! Mer-ow!
I like the affection and the heat between these two whatever happens down the road. As for Darcy, well, I’d like to think she’ll hit bottom soon, so she can give straightening out a chance.
I love the foreshadowing in the line, “She brought the phone back to her ear responded in a way she’d regret.” Can’t wait to hear what that’s all about.
Oh, and the ending? Very hot.
This is getting interesting…
getting? crap, I need to write better. Thank you.
Excellent. You surprise me. There is a certain softness between two women that skips around the understanding of those who have never felt it. You seem to have captured it quite beautifully
Awesome! I gotta get more time so that I can read the whole story! I catch it in snips and pips … one day …
Sad segment, but good to see Helene empowered.
eden
ohhhh that Helene.
Nicely done, Lance.
i loved the flow and the visual detail in this. I always do, but this particular scene really read like something I was watching in a movie. I can visualize the smallness of the apartment, the need to get into a closet to talk privately. I can hear Darcy on the other end, and visualize her curling up in a chair, mourning, not saying much to helene but getting emotion across. I can see Helene’s frustration and regret… and shame and guilt too, likely, as she was in Ramona’s room talking to Darcy.. even though im not sure Ramona knew about Helene’s past with Darcy. She wonders about being jealous, and I’m not sure if she understands what’s going on there.
I liked the tenderness in the physical touches at the end.
This is hot. But mine is smokin’ hot.
Mmmmm yummy!
You do have a way with a love scene.
Another ship launched towards Troy.
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this one was one of my favorites, I just liked the way it flowed and gave us the angst..I truly love angst. You gave it to me in spades here, and then the ending…SO HOT.
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