Millicent Stingley took two hours preparing for her perp walk. She settled on a blue Chanel pantsuit that accentuated her curves. Hippy and busty, Millicent’s 160 IQ hunted prey in the right outfit.
****blogger’s note****
Millicent was created last year for a short story – Cinnamon Girl, about a female chemist serial killer who specializes in poison and drug hybrids. She’s being expanded for a novella length story later this year as well as a summer blog series with my friend Tara called Dead Money http://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/dead-money/
This is a reworked opening 33 words of Millicent’s story. Trifextra wanted the first 33 words of a book you’re writing. http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/ I’m pretty sure I’ll keep the name “Cinnamon Girl” for the title but for this exercise, a song I used before with her, AFI’s Miss Murder, is going to be used, now.
Yes.
So much yes!
I think it definitely draws you in and makes you want to read the rest of the story.
thanks dawn
If I didn’t already know so much about Millicent, this would really leaving me wanting to know more. It.s definitely an excellent opening.
i changed it a lot…glad u still like it
It one of my favorite summer readings!
I’m defininately interested in reading more. How could anybody not be?
awesome, thanks
Forgot to mention, I’m a sucker for a smart woman!
Well, she has to look good, doesn’t she? I’d choose a Chanel suit too if one were in my closest. So does she get ID’d?
you’ll have to keep reading…thank you
Millicent is so intriguing. The name alone makes you wonder about her, it’s such an old fashioned name
Millicent. Even her name evokes the thought of Cinnamon Girl. Gotta love a stylish killer. Killer pumps, too, no doubt! Thanks for introducing me to a new character – you certainly have a knack for creating strong women. Usually it’s female writers who do that, but I’ve found several men on these blogs who are secure enough to create kickass, badass women! Loved it. Amy
Don’t know if you saw this, but it’s right down your alley! http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/07/24/real-women-dverse/
PS I’m subscribing so I don’t miss anything now! Thx, Amy
thanks! Millicent is one of my most popular ones. she’s pretty out there.
She has great taste in clothes!
Very colorful lines. I like lots.
Great detail. The last line is excellent.
Definitely sets the tone for your Lady Killer.
this sounds like a story right up my alley. i liked the last bit, “hunted prey in the right outfit”
Love the name. Love what you manage to convey in 33 words. Love the way she bursts onto the scene. Nice.
You had me from Millicent Stingley. How will the hunting expedition play out? Thanks for playing along with us again. We look forward to reading more of your work in the next challenge.
Hah! Just as clever as Millicent’s IQ. Love it!
Anna
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Good rework, Lance,
eden
thanks e
Ah, Millicent. I’m glad to see more of her.
come back tomorrow, annabelle….two new chapters of Dead Money with Millicent and Pauley
You never cease to amaze me. I can’t wait to read more about the curvy Cinnamon Girl (does she perhaps play derby?)
nope…but if you read the Dead Money tab or Cinnamon Girl tabs at the top of my blog, you can see a lot more of Millicent. thank you
Diggin’ the imagery in such a short space. Definitely want more.
New to this whole Trifecta thing and your page. Following you now, as I like what I’m reading!
Christine
@thatgalkiki
thank you christine. I love new readers/followers. welcome. I’ll run over to your place and return the favor.
Old fashioned name, blue Chanel, and a perp walk. Nicely done. Millicent certainly lives up to her hook in the subsequent events.
awesome, cam…thank yous