Glass-eyed and limping, she shuffled through the twenty-four-hour pharmacy’s automated doors. She wrote her request on a prescription pad. Too afraid to speak, she endured the condescending glare of the middle-aged male pharmacist.
****blogger’s note****
Who’s the zombie here in these 33 words?
For this week’s Trifextra for Trifecta Writing Challenge:
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| Credit: Zora Neale Hurston |
We want thirty three words that are somehow related to Hurston’s zombie sighting. How you structure your response is entirely up to you.
I’m using The Cranberries Zombie, even though it’s about violence in Ireland, because the Zombie in that song is about England, and their treatment of the Irish, similar to American government’s treatment of women, lately.
Here’s The Cranberries Zombie:
Not sure if I can make a link inside a comment but, here goes anyway……..love the Cranberries but, this is my favourite version of Zombie. It was performed by Dilana, who was runner-up in a reality show called Rockstar Supernova. Anyway, this is a ferocious version of the song. I love three things about it: 1- how chatty the audience is in the beginning and how blown away they are as she rips into the song, 2- how Dilana puts the lead guitar player in his place when he gets a little carried away around the 5-6 minute mark and, 3- just how Dilana prowls around the stage, in complete command of the music and her band. Totally dig the powerful female thing in this video! Hope the link works:http://youtu.be/8CMLovnzh-Y
If it doesn’t then, go to Youtube and search for Zombie- Dilana’s at Cozy’s
loved it. you’re spot on with it all. I know Dilana. I;ve always wondered how she didn’t make it big.
I should add, the song actually starts around the 2:00 minute mark. The first two mins. are just intros and tuning of instruments. Final eight minutes….buckle up!
You get the feeling that something horrific has happened, just from those 33 words. Very effective hook.
thank you very much
What isn’t said is as important as what is… powerful 33 words.
thanks tar rah, I agree with your assessment. when we do these 33, the unsaid is what’s key.
Interesting and unique take on the prompt. I like where your imagination took you. Nice.
thanks stephanie
There is no cure for curiosity says Dorothy Parker. I like when I get to use my imagination as I am here. 33s are hard but you told a whole story and I’m happy to wonder.
thanks a lot gina
Like the others, i thought you wrote a lot in 33 words. I read your comment to the Trifecta post, but there’s as much connection here as you want it to be. Nicely done.
Love where you took this prompt. Love the message behind those 33 words. Lots of power…lots of passion.
Nicely done.
Oooh. Nice job, Lance. This is a great take on it.
thanks runner mel
It probably comes as no surprise to hear that I love this post. I adore fiction, like probably everyone in this group there have been times that my life was probably saved because I could lose myself in a story and forget my own.
But I’m really drawn to making connections with the crazy-assed stuff that is going on with the world, maybe to a fault right now. Your story does complete justice to the subject as well as expressing outrage for something that should be exposed for its stupidity.
i appreciate your reaction and thank you for the great comments
It’s good to know not everyone is oblivious to the roadblocks women face today in all aspects of life. It is little things like this that keeps my hope for a better future for everyone–regardless of sex, race, religion, lifestyle, etc.–alive and bright
Amen to the last few comments!
I actually felt physical pain in my chest for her as I read, and re-read this piece. No one should have to feel that shame or endure such degradation in this day and age. It is outrageous! I found myself furious with the male pharmacist behind the counter! Who the Hell does he think he is, and where does he get off judging her?
Anyway, clearly you have touched a hot button.
Well done, my friend.
thanks amy
Sounds like what the future holds. Luckily I have a female pharmacist friend!
good for you
Hah… very interesting take on the prompt. Making me think! Nice connection between the prompt, zombies, the Cranberries and women’s rights…
thanks for your comment
This post sent me on a whirlwind internet search on zombie research. Thank you?
*bowing*