After a very special 100 word song last week, hanging with the dudes at Dudewrite.com, we’re back to whatever passes for normal around here. This means Jake getting pulled in different direction in his living room and kitchen by Gus and Mallory, is back, too. Before we get to his 100 words of drama, I’d like to introduce a new 100 word playa – Donetta Sifford. She tracked us down a couple of weeks ago and wrote a great piece last week. Leeroy has a new friend and asked her to pick this week’s tune. I like new writers. I hope she sticks around. You can find the cool named Donetta on the twitter @donettasifford and at her well-written blog : http://myconstantthought.blogspot.com/2012/12/this-could-be-fun.html . She chose Beautiful Disaster by 311.
Here’s my 100:
Last time: http://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/2013/01/23/100-word-song-soul-love/
Augusta’s scowl was identical to her sister’s. Royal blue eyes, small, flared nostrils, and teeth gnashed. Jake didn’t back down. He turned his back to Mallory, still standing in the kitchen, clenched his jaw and leaned into his sister-in-law.
“She let me go that day in the hospital, Gus. I never stopped loving her, but she….”
Augusta put her index finger into Jake’s chest. Tears danced with her eyeliner. She whispered with malice.
“Shut your damn mouth. Camille never stopped loving you. And in her kitchen, where she made you dinner is a disaster not nearly as beautiful as her.”

You go Gus!!!!! Take them both down!
Gus has gumption, I like her!
tears danced with her eyeliner. i like it.
Gus is a spitfire. I like Gus.
“Tears danced with her eyeliner.” That’s a great image Lance.
dude, you read my story? awesome
Gus is a great character. She’s a hellcat. Reminds me of me.
I also agree with everyone else that the “Tears danced with her eyeliner” line kicks arse.
Go gus! I love the image of her scowl looking like Camille’s.
I need to check out this 100 word writing prompt. It seems like a good way to write a long piece for me, as I have not really attempted anything lengthy in years. Enjoyed as always, Lance.
i would love for you to write for 100 words…please do
I will try it. I used to do some writing prompts when I first started the blog–think that is how you and I connected–but the visual arts became a stronger interest, but I miss writing, and this feels like a realistic and doable task.
I’m left wondering if Jake isn’t punishing himself with Mallory. Does guilt make him lose himself in this disaster?
Loved the tension in this piece, and the way you flipped the title. And I loved the prompt that Donetta provided!
thanks…I agree. I’m not a huge 311 fan but that song was perfect
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Loved the last line! This was an intense setting. I liked it!
“Augusta put her index finger into Jake’s chest. Tears danced with her eyeliner. She whispered with malice.” There is so much, in these few words. A whole story. Love love love this line! It definitely gives definition to Gus.
thanks for looking at that whole section. I thought the finger and the whisper were important.
last minute entry. “pant”
awesome! wanna pick the new song?
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