100 Word Song – Of Lillies And Remains

We’ve been way too happy, nice, fun and positive around here at 100 word song, Even Leeroy the Robot was starting to dance around and smile. It was a really creative week with new interest in 100 word song style. Vickie gave us a good template with Ben Harper’s The Woman In You. Some of you really ran with it and made it sexy, stylish, funny, and interesting. My boy, t, http://aslongasimsinging.wordpress.com/100-word-song/410-woman-in-you/  has been hitting home runs week after week with his entries. He now has a serialized story with his 100s. I asked him to pick this week’s song. He and I have very similar musical tastes and I was expecting old school punk or something loud and fast and mean. Instead, t got weird. He chose Of Lillies And Remains by Bauhaus. There’s so much you brilliant writers can do with this one. I went back to Soul To Body and wrote about Violet and her dad. There’s a surprise at the end. Here’s my 1o0.

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Last time with Soul To Body: https://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/2012/04/03/100-word-song-runaway/

Violet appeared asleep, curled in a dark blue chair in the hospital room’s corner. Her small, bare feet dangled over the arms inches away from a bouquet of lillies delivered earlier in the day. His wife’s whispers couldn’t compete with the hissing of the oxygen machine. He moved in close to her chapped lips.

“I want you to move on. It’s been over a year since I was really your wife. “

Her clammy hands, once warm and satisfying, were limp inside his grasp. He looked up and caught Violet staring at him.

“Camille, my love remains with you and Violet.”

You can find the rest of Soul To Body, so far, here:  https://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/soul-to-body/

Link up and we’ll come back next Tuesday with a new song and talk about how much better your life is now that you’ve written to the weird and depressing tones of Peter Murphy and the boys. Here’s t’s pick, Of Lillies & Remains by Bauhaus. 

41 responses to “100 Word Song – Of Lillies And Remains

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  2. Fantastic! You know this is my favorite story of yours, and every little breath any of them take gets my attention. The emotional struggle of knowing she is going, and his desire to remain with her to the end is tender, touching, romantic, and endearing. I just flat love this!

  3. Well, you know what I thought of it. So heartbreaking but up lifting in a way with her releasing him. She knows he still has his life to lead. No, he shouldn’t run out and shack up with someone but he also shouldn’t spend his entire life mourning.

    But OH, that hissing machine and the whispers. Very effective imagery

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  5. the hissing and the whispers, Violet pretending to be asleep and the release, in so many ways. I loved this.

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